Sorry about this; I just decided to go over the two versions of the book I have downloaded, the original and the updated, to see if the issues have been addressed.
Page 25: As noted elsewhere, in the penultimate paragraph, it is the lower pair of arms that are “smaller and weaker, intended for fine work”.
Page 101: The Guadix Drift is still called the “Gaudix Drift” in the first paragraph.
Page 108: In the second paragraph there is still a mention of the “Galian League”, when I am pretty sure that it is meant to be the Galian Federation.
Page 121: The Outworld subsector is still twice referred to as the “Outworlds” subsector. The first time in the first paragraph and the second time in the third paragraph.
Page 123: Lepanto is still described as an Amber Zone. I am okay with the retcon, but I should note that neither the map of Diamond-Prince Subsector, on page 120, nor the list of the worlds of the subsector, on page 119, say that it is an Amber Zone.
Page 146: The planet listing for the Windfleet Subsector is still a repeat of the Guadix Drift planet listing, rather than the right listing.
Page 149: Though there has been some corrections to the Dova’s World’s characteristic box there are still several mistakes. A starport rating of “X” means “no starport” rather than a poor one. Size “1” means a diameter of 1,600 km and not 16,000 km. Atmosphere “0” means no atmosphere and not an “exotic” one. Hydrosphere “0” means “0 - 5%” hydrographic percentage and not “Water World”.
The Gateway characteristic box still has the error of saying that Technology Level “B” means “Quality Computers” when I think it should mean “Lower Average Imperial”.
Page 163: The map of the Beckann Subsector still has Coralee as part of the Viyard Concourse rather than the Trindel Confederacy, though I acknowledge this could simply be to make the borders of the polities more consistent or aesthetically pleasing.
Page 177: While the description in the Somberview writeup now says the correct population of 600 million it seems bizarre that the characteristic box nows says “600 millions” rather than “Hundreds of millions”. The box was already correct in the previous version and now just seems inconsistent with the other characteristic boxes in the book, not to mention that “600 millions” is bad grammar. I admit this is a minor nitpick but I thought I should bring it up.
Page 183: It seems to me that in the act of removing the statement that Waystation claims ownership of the Paradise of El, that the full sentence was not properly deleted. There is now a random space and full stop after the first sentence of the page.
Page190/191: There seems to be no change to the description of the anti-fighter missiles despite the problem that Annatar Giftbringer brought up.
Page 195: There is seems to be no change in the Vehicle Bay and Vehicle Maintenance Bay descriptions, please do not hesitate to correct me if I am wrong. So am I to assume that the authors did not agree with Geir’s assessment of them?
Page 198: Like with the above there seems to be no change to the “streamlined light hull’ between versions. So does that mean there is no problem with the original?
Page 205: There still seems to be no reference to what a “Deep Space Manoeuvring System” is for those who did not buy the Deepnight Revelation set. Again, please correct me if I am wrong on this matter.
I was going to comment on the fuel issue that Annatar Giftbringer brought up but I am struggling to understand how much fuel is necessary. It seems to me that the 800 tons that the Deep Space Operations Vessel carries is only enough for the Jump-Drive and noting else, such as the Power Plant, but I could be wrong in this.
Page 207: There still seems to be only six staterooms on the deck plan despite the characteristics of the ship given on page 205 saying it has eight staterooms.
Page 209: The Planetology Lab is still listed as 3 tons. The description of the Planetology Lab on page 195 says that “every four tons of lab space allows one person to work”, this indicates that a Planetology Lab of 3 tons is not viable.
Page 220: The federation is still only capable of building jump-1 ships despite the planet Gateway having a class A starport and a technological level of “B”. I assume it has been decided that there is no contradiction here.
Page 221: The ship still has a Jump Control/1 cost of MCr0.1. This is despite the fact that the ship has a core computer and the that page 20 of the High Guard 2022 Update says that the cost of the jump control software is included in the prince of the core computer.
Page 222: The deck plan still mentions a “Launch deck”, however this is not mentioned in the description on the previous page. I also cannot find a reference to what a “Launch deck” is in either the Core Rulebook 2022 Update or the High Guard 2022 Update. It is possible that it meant to say “Launch tube”, but that is also not mentioned on page 221.
Page 227: It still says that the 40 ton ship has a plasma barbette despite the Highguard 2022 Update having it that a ship needs at least 70 tons to have the required number of Firmpoints.
I do not have an opinion on the cargo space issue of the Cargo lighter, on page 226, or the S-40 Gunship, on page 227, so I will leave that for other people to work out.
Page 246: The description of the ship on page 245 says that it has over 24,000 tons dedicated to Cargo Space. However the Cargo Space is still labelled as “9” despite its small size.
I should note that several of the grammatical changes suggested by GabrielGABFonseca were not implemented, however for the most part I think both the way the phrases are put in the book and the suggestions offered work so I am fine with them staying the same. I will however agree with GabrielGABFonseca that quotation marks be put around “thinking people” and “us” in the first paragraph of page 35. This should make it slightly easier to understand.
On a request for clarification note, in the Sydites’ characteristic box, on page 26, we have STR + 2 and then it says that working with the upper arms gives STR + 2. Does that mean that if you work with the upper arms you get STR + 4, or does it mean that the original STR + 2 bonus only exists when working with the upper arms.
I apologise for the extreme wordiness of this post. I was trying to be as thorough as possible here. I am also sorry if I missed anything or came across as rude, if I was it was not meant.
Please do not hesitate to let me know if anything I wrote is confusing or ambiguous. I will hopefully attempt to clarify myself.
I thank you for your time.
Edit: I forgot to check something before the original post and so I have now added a new comment.
Edit 2: Got a fellow commenter's name wrong, for which I apologise. I have now corrected it.
