vladthemad
Mongoose
On P. 17, under the Commission header, in the first paragraph, the sentence "A Traveller may
attempt a commission roll once per term, and trying for commission is optional." should probably be dropped. It's confusing for new players when compared to the paragraph after, and isn't really needed.
Also in that second paragraph, "You may only attempt to gain a commission in your first term unless your SOC is 9 or higher, in which case you may try for a commission in any term." is vague regarding terms and might cause confusion. "You may only attempt to gain a commission in your first term of any military career unless your SOC is 9 or higher, in which case you may try for a commission in any term during that career." would be better.
attempt a commission roll once per term, and trying for commission is optional." should probably be dropped. It's confusing for new players when compared to the paragraph after, and isn't really needed.
Also in that second paragraph, "You may only attempt to gain a commission in your first term unless your SOC is 9 or higher, in which case you may try for a commission in any term." is vague regarding terms and might cause confusion. "You may only attempt to gain a commission in your first term of any military career unless your SOC is 9 or higher, in which case you may try for a commission in any term during that career." would be better.