Postby Geir » Sat Aug 01, 2020 2:59 am
Fire on the Sindalian Main Errata:
(No spoilers, so I think I can post it here without censure especially since I think it's really good and people should buy it. Lots of detail, yet lots of consequential decisions to be made by the Travellers.)
p. 1: Contents: "Entering the" and "Sindalian Main" is split as two entries for page 20
p. 2: "Trojan Bight" Not a familiar term, but I think I get it. If it's the region coreward of the "Outrim Void" then it would help to add it as a label to the map on page 3. But if it is synonymous with the Outrim Void, then just use that term in the text.
p. 4: I don't think there are Chirpers on Andor and Candory, just Droyne, and I'm fairly certain that's not why those worlds are interdicted. Visually searching travellermaps, I found three red-zoned Chirper worlds that could serve as examples: Burke in Zarushagar, Brirvoy in Ealiyasiyw, and Leenitakot in Hinterworlds.
p. 7: Map: inconsistent shading of Green and Amber zones
p. 8: Map: "Dpress Aquarium" and "Dpress National Dance Theatre" Dpres ? And even at 200% on a giant monitor I can barely make out the street names. I love detailed maps, but only when I can see the details.
p. 9: "one or more rumours described in ‘Showing the Flag’ on page 20." That section has no listed rumors. It would be useful, though, so I'm assuming they exist, but got lost in formatting.
p. 16: names for the scout-crewed and naval escort ships would have added flavor. Also, maybe I'm dense, but it took me multiple readings to realize that for the task force the Travellers pick three of the six navy ships and don't get all six.
p. 23: "Whilst 9,000 people remain on Janus, few are ethnic Janusians." A little confusing. From the following text I can only assume one of two clarifications: a) The actual meaning is that few of the existing ethnic Janusians have returned to Janus; or b) most of Janus's population is not descended from ethnic Janusians. The text implies b), but a) seems more likely the intent. Of course, both could be true. Which would make the statement confusing, but correct.
p. 29: Note that the stats on the Fleet Courier in Highguard imply a crew of 16, which seems high. Looks like you could probably run it safely (but not efficiently) with as few a six. In any case all but two will be part of the detachment.
p. 31: Also reduce the armor on the SDB to 11. I assume the Dragon is the 400-ton boat. The two SDBs have no name in my copy of Highguard.
p. 32: "• TOP (see page 31)" see page 33
p. 33: Hull points for TOP would be another useful stat, or a full station workup in ship stat form. [I had an odd insight just now, but that would be a spoiler and based on Referee knowledge]
p. 34: "but depending on how they handled the situation they not be able to achieve complete success" There is a very important word missing here just before "not". It could be "might" or it could be "will" I'm hoping it's "might".
p. 39: Just a note: Standard Chirpers have the talent of psionic invisibility. (or did in classic Adventure 2, anyway).
p. 42-43: No ages on these characters. Based on text, image, and number of skills I would suggest: 30, 34, 34, 66, 50. Also note that in Gebrohda's catch phrase "security clearance" might be more accurate than "pay grade".
p. 44-46 Kæsia-class:
*needs Jump Control/2 not /1.
*Fuel tankage seems to be enough to support Jump 2 X2.
*Fire Control /2 costs 4.0 not 0.4
*Legend: "12. Briefing Rooms" plural, but the specs say there is only one briefing room
*Legend: "13. High stateroom" singular, but there are eight high staterooms
p. 47-48: Elar Kha'yaheh-class:
*Aerofins should only require 1.75 tons and cost 0.175
*Jump Control/1 is certainly not needed.
*Fire Control /2 costs 4.0 not 0.4
*The barbette requires 15 power, not 8. (fortunately, the powerplant supports that)
General non-spoiler insight: There is a dearth of published Imperial Navy destroyer and light cruiser designs - that whole 2500-25000 ton range (above that and you can fit a small spinal gun, below that and I would call it a frigate or "Adventure Class Starship"). I think this adventure would be perfect for a ship of that size range. I guess I should design one. Or two.